Hi Atm0s. I have no idea what you're talking about, buddy. Milla actually can't disappear at all; she's only absent after 4:00 PM, and you can only interact with her at the bypass. Maybe you mean Palmira? Yeah, she does disappear after all her quests, and that's normal. Overall, just keep an eye on the quests.
XD She absolutely did disappear. I rushed through VN mode later and so found out that it was when she went working she just never returned. Doesn't matter to me anyhow, that save is dead.
Ah, yes, there was such a moment. I'll check if there's an error there, but in theory, it should have returned after a few days. Ideally, she should have sent you a message saying she's back.^^
You're asking the right questions^^ There are plenty of hints and clues, and I hope you've already found answers to some of them. In turn, I'll gradually add and reveal the answers.
Aight Going to try this now I don't know, How much Content is in but I'm Thrilled Trying This. I'll comment soon for reviews and stuff. Good luck to me I guess.
There is a scene where 1 Lily's sister( I actually don't know if that person is Lily or her sister because the dialogue is really confusing. Really need Dev to confirm it) and her friend are raped in the past. Because the later plot seems quite dark like the rape scene I mentioned and the violence and blood scene (revenge scene) so can you tell in advance if there are any tags planned? I'm only worried about the main LIs (mostly NTR or abused).
This story fragment serves as a flashback about Lily's past. "The main character is confused, thinking it's her sister, as he cannot be present in her memories." (Not sure if explaining and dissecting the event is the right approach, but it seems to be a concern for you).
-As for the tags: NTR - is not planned. Abuse - it depends on what you mean."
"Primarily, I'm trying to tell an interesting story that evokes emotions rather than conforming to specific tags. I'm not strong with tags, so I can't specify which tags are planned."
-As for the darkness:The whole story is built on conflict and its resolution. "The resolution depends on the situation and the character."
So yes, I will continue to have both positive and dark moments in my story.
I think you should clearly write those sensitive tags or add a function to warn players and be allowed to skip scenes like that. Because in Harem games, players are extremely sensitive to jump scenes related to LI being harmed (especially related to sex). I've played quite a few games like that and the devs are usually very careful with this
Shut the hell up YogSothoth1982 and go on somewhere you and the rest of them clowns are some real retard. The ones that make shit up. and causes issue for people that want to create games for you losers to play. Stop crying or go play a game that is for you.
I don't have any femdom content. "There are only characters and their personalities (Problem = Solution)"
But most likely, the question is about the scene with the catgirl cosplay. (I understood this from your comments on f95). It can be avoided by not completing Isaac's quests in sandbox mode. In the VN mode, there is currently no such option.
It's a good game with plenty of good ideas but is in desperate need of proofreading and refinement. As someone with a good bit of experience in game design and as someone who has spent years playing games like this I’ll give some tips. Feel free to ignore or use any of my tips.
1 -is obviously to find proof readers, the game seems to have a good premise but the bad translation makes it really hard to tell what people are talking about. I recommend asking your discord if anyone is willing to do a basic translation for free.
2 -this one is probably partly caused the the translation issue but the explanations at certain points of the game are really lacking and I would recommend expanding on both the explanations from characters and just the dialog in general so that conversations feel more fleshed out. Right now it feels like the characters are rushing through conversations a bit too much.
3 -is to try and add a bit more contrast in the scenes. What I mean by this is making characters more clear from the background, the art is great but in some scenes it hurts my eyes because many colors are often a bit too bright or too dark. This is something you will get better at with practice so it's not that big of a deal.
These are just a few small tips so do with them as you will, I would also recommend talking to other game creators in the same genre. Many of them are very cool people and will help point you in better directions than I could. I also recommend in the future every few updates to go back and touch up the earlier parts of the game as you will improve a lot as you work on this and will most definitely find things you can improve from past updates, though you should not worry about this much at this stage of development.
I'm sorry, I really tried to make it through all the available content but I just couldn't. I'm just repeating what has already been brought to your attention, but the translations and proofreading desperately need some work.
The screenshots look great, the description and what little of the story I played through seems interesting. It's just too troublesome to make sense of what's being said most of the time.
I think this is a title I'll try again in the future once some more updates come out
I've got a problem, and I've been trying to find a solution for a while now. Currently, my game is distributed for free, and I don't have the means to pay a professional for their work. I'm trying to find someone who can help me resolve the issue with the English text, to correct it. However, since I'm working alone, without any support or funding, it's not easy. Right now, this issue is a top priority for me. Thanks for your feedback!
I just found your game and it is as you said it needs a proofreader. I would be up for it because i enjoy ur game n would do it for free in my spare time. Just think about it because i don't wanna see ur game get deleted because of bad spelling just to good for that it definitely is a good game.
Hey buddy. Characters looked good so I decided to give this a go. But your English is atrocious. That means bad. Get yourself a proper translator (and no google is not proper) to proof your work. If you fix it I'll give it another shot, cause it really does look good.
Hey. Thanks a lot for the constructive feedback =) Regarding the voices, as you mentioned, it's a matter of taste, and everything related to music, voice , and sound can be turned off. I personally like it that way, even though it adds more work. I didn't quite understand what you meant by text size. At the moment, there are no funds to pay a professional proofreader, but there is an issue, and I will try to fix it in future patches. If you'd like to explain where exactly the text is too small or suggest some changes, I invite you to my Discord.
Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it. There is a lot of room for development and a lot of ideas. There would only be time to do only the project. But at the moment everything is built only on pure enthusiasm.
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Yo so I've done all the quests that I can but Milla just vanished at 7/30 and it says go outside? Seems like the quest bugged out but I'm not sure.
Hi Atm0s.
I have no idea what you're talking about, buddy. Milla actually can't disappear at all; she's only absent after 4:00 PM, and you can only interact with her at the bypass. Maybe you mean Palmira? Yeah, she does disappear after all her quests, and that's normal. Overall, just keep an eye on the quests.
XD She absolutely did disappear. I rushed through VN mode later and so found out that it was when she went working she just never returned. Doesn't matter to me anyhow, that save is dead.
Ah, yes, there was such a moment. I'll check if there's an error there, but in theory, it should have returned after a few days. Ideally, she should have sent you a message saying she's back.^^
how do lily lost her body
why is Alice flying
what happened to the mom
why is the begening cut ?
You're asking the right questions^^
There are plenty of hints and clues, and I hope you've already found answers to some of them.
In turn, I'll gradually add and reveal the answers.
Aight Going to try this now I don't know, How much Content is in but I'm Thrilled Trying This. I'll comment soon for reviews and stuff. Good luck to me I guess.
There is a scene where 1 Lily's sister( I actually don't know if that person is Lily or her sister because the dialogue is really confusing. Really need Dev to confirm it) and her friend are raped in the past.
Because the later plot seems quite dark like the rape scene I mentioned and the violence and blood scene (revenge scene) so can you tell in advance if there are any tags planned? I'm only worried about the main LIs (mostly NTR or abused).
This story fragment serves as a flashback about Lily's past. "The main character is confused, thinking it's her sister, as he cannot be present in her memories."
(Not sure if explaining and dissecting the event is the right approach, but it seems to be a concern for you).
-As for the tags: NTR - is not planned. Abuse - it depends on what you mean."
"Primarily, I'm trying to tell an interesting story that evokes emotions rather than conforming to specific tags. I'm not strong with tags, so I can't specify which tags are planned."
-As for the darkness: The whole story is built on conflict and its resolution. "The resolution depends on the situation and the character."
So yes, I will continue to have both positive and dark moments in my story.
I think you should clearly write those sensitive tags or add a function to warn players and be allowed to skip scenes like that. Because in Harem games, players are extremely sensitive to jump scenes related to LI being harmed (especially related to sex). I've played quite a few games like that and the devs are usually very careful with this
Ok, in F95 someone has posted several images of it. Personally, I'm not going to play a game where they're going to show me how some guys rape the LIs.
Nobody is raping the LIs. But I'm glad you've made up your mind; clearly, the game isn't for you. Have a great day!
The truth is that I don't like rape in general. That they were LIs would only make it worse.
Shut the hell up YogSothoth1982 and go on somewhere you and the rest of them clowns are some real retard. The ones that make shit up. and causes issue for people that want to create games for you losers to play. Stop crying or go play a game that is for you.
Is femdom avoidable?
I don't have any femdom content. "There are only characters and their personalities (Problem = Solution)"
But most likely, the question is about the scene with the catgirl cosplay. (I understood this from your comments on f95). It can be avoided by not completing Isaac's quests in sandbox mode. In the VN mode, there is currently no such option.
And if the scene is not femdom, what is it?
It's a good game with plenty of good ideas but is in desperate need of proofreading and refinement. As someone with a good bit of experience in game design and as someone who has spent years playing games like this I’ll give some tips. Feel free to ignore or use any of my tips.
1 -is obviously to find proof readers, the game seems to have a good premise but the bad translation makes it really hard to tell what people are talking about. I recommend asking your discord if anyone is willing to do a basic translation for free.
2 -this one is probably partly caused the the translation issue but the explanations at certain points of the game are really lacking and I would recommend expanding on both the explanations from characters and just the dialog in general so that conversations feel more fleshed out. Right now it feels like the characters are rushing through conversations a bit too much.
3 -is to try and add a bit more contrast in the scenes. What I mean by this is making characters more clear from the background, the art is great but in some scenes it hurts my eyes because many colors are often a bit too bright or too dark. This is something you will get better at with practice so it's not that big of a deal.
These are just a few small tips so do with them as you will, I would also recommend talking to other game creators in the same genre. Many of them are very cool people and will help point you in better directions than I could. I also recommend in the future every few updates to go back and touch up the earlier parts of the game as you will improve a lot as you work on this and will most definitely find things you can improve from past updates, though you should not worry about this much at this stage of development.
I'm sorry, I really tried to make it through all the available content but I just couldn't. I'm just repeating what has already been brought to your attention, but the translations and proofreading desperately need some work.
The screenshots look great, the description and what little of the story I played through seems interesting. It's just too troublesome to make sense of what's being said most of the time.
I think this is a title I'll try again in the future once some more updates come out
I've got a problem, and I've been trying to find a solution for a while now. Currently, my game is distributed for free, and I don't have the means to pay a professional for their work. I'm trying to find someone who can help me resolve the issue with the English text, to correct it. However, since I'm working alone, without any support or funding, it's not easy. Right now, this issue is a top priority for me. Thanks for your feedback!
Hello VitaYok,
I just found your game and it is as you said it needs a proofreader. I would be up for it because i enjoy ur game n would do it for free in my spare time. Just think about it because i don't wanna see ur game get deleted because of bad spelling just to good for that it definitely is a good game.
Hey buddy.
Characters looked good so I decided to give this a go.
But your English is atrocious. That means bad.
Get yourself a proper translator (and no google is not proper) to proof your work.
If you fix it I'll give it another shot, cause it really does look good.
Sorry about that. There is an issue, and I'm aware of it =) Trying to find a solution, so not all hope is lost, buddy=)
Happy to hear that!
Banger audio, personally not a big fan of the character sounds but that's subjective and the inclusion of it was worthy of praise.
Promising story, absolutely love the new gen UI. Though I would prefer having the text (on selection stuff) slightly larger.
Amazing designs and vibrance, but I would comment that the brightness is a bit high, so where there are white backgrounds I get flashbanged.
Only one thing stood out that is very jarring, and that's the english translation(?). I would try and get a proficient speaker to help proofread.
All in all, very very good stuff and definitely looking forward for more.
Hey.
Thanks a lot for the constructive feedback =)
Regarding the voices, as you mentioned, it's a matter of taste, and everything related to music, voice , and sound can be turned off.
I personally like it that way, even though it adds more work.
I didn't quite understand what you meant by text size.
At the moment, there are no funds to pay a professional proofreader, but there is an issue, and I will try to fix it in future patches.
If you'd like to explain where exactly the text is too small or suggest some changes, I invite you to my Discord.
Fire soundtracks
11/10
Good game
Good story
Sexy and cute characters
It's quite a novelty for adding a sound to a character while talking.
But it's very good , so sexy !
so a lot of details
i can comment more in the future update !
sry for my bad english
11/10, that's like =). I love the details even though it takes a lot of time. I'm glad you liked it. I'll be waiting for your comment in v0.2.
Ngl this might be my secondary vn,that holographic phone is nice as hell+i fw thw story so far.I can't wait to see what you have in store for us.
Thank you very much, I'm glad you liked it. There is a lot of room for development and a lot of ideas. There would only be time to do only the project. But at the moment everything is built only on pure enthusiasm.
I like that holographic phone. Hehe
=)
"The future is here. Upgrade your smartphone to enter a new era" XD
Android version ??
At the moment, there is no Android version. I encountered some difficulties with the Android version, so I decided to postpone it for now